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My tutor commented on my work and i can agree with his points:

-The end scene doesnt really come across that the girlfriend is ill or dying; I need to make it more obvious that she is ill, to do this i will film some shots of her coughing up some blood, lots of pills, and a blood pressure monitor with her,

-I also need to film more shots of driving from outside the car. This i can do easily as i just need to find a day in which me and my brother can just drive about.

- I need to make the film more snappy, which i managed to do during the editing by just chopping the shots up bit by bit to help the film shorter.